A museum near your home looking for people to do part time/voluntary You would like to do some voluntary unpaid work at the museum.

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Dear Sir/Madam I am

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am really interested in working as a volunteer in the museum unpaid. It would be a great chance for me to work in

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since my thesis is about painting before

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, I have diverse background information related to safety and

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clean the paintings.

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will be

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during visiting days. The

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which is limited to Saturdays and Sundays from noon to night. Thanks for your time and your consideration. please let me know if you need more information. Looking forward to

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back from you. Best regards Narges

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 4.0

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