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A museum near your home looking for people to do part time/voluntary You would like to do some voluntary unpaid work at the museum.

#museum #home #people #part #time #work
Dear Sir/Madam I am
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 am really interested in working as a volunteer in the museum unpaid. It would be a great chance for me to work in
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 museum
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 since my thesis is about painting before
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centuries
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.
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, I have diverse background information related to safety and
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 clean the paintings.
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 will be
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 during visiting days. The
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my
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 which is limited to Saturdays and Sundays from noon to night. Thanks for your time and your consideration. please let me know if you need more information. Looking forward to
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 back from you. Best regards Narges
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