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You recently took a trip with a taxi company. The driver behaved in an unacceotable way and you had a lot of problems. You complained to the company but no-one has replied to the taxi company. In your letter: - so why you are writing - how you feel explain what happened - tell them what you would like them to do

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Dear Mr Smith, I am writing
this
 letter to express my disappointment about
state
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a state
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 which I went to
trip
 with your
driver
last
 week. I feel
myself
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very
disappointment
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 with you and your servant because of
taxi
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a taxi
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driver
. We
begun
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began
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 our
trip
. But
a
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the
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tire
 of
driver's
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the driver's
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car
 was low quality. When we were going to
city
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the city
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, the
tire
 of
car
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the car
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was break
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broke
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 down. We stopped and
driver
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the driver
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 changed out of a bad
tire
 into
extra
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the extra
an extra
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tire
.
As a result
, we had lost lots of time. After changing tires, we continued our
trip
.
Petrol
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The petrol
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 of
car
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the car
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 was little. So, we had to stop
car
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the car
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 again. Fortunately,
driver
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the driver
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 had taken extra petrol before we started
trip
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the trip
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. He poured benzine
to
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 his
car
 and we continued again. He was driving his
car
 with apathy.
As a result
, he crashed his
car
to
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into
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 a tree. But
damage
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the damage
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of
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from
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accident
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the accident
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 was little. So we continued our
trip
 again. After
accident
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the accident
an accident
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,
driver
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the driver
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 drove his
car
 very fast in order to save time. I demanded him to drive slowly but he did not agree to my requirement.
As a result
,
driver
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the driver
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 paid a tine.
Finally
, we reached
city
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the city
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. But I was sad. Regarding the service, I would suggest that you speak to the
driver
conserned
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concerned
 the ensure that other users are not
similarly
 inconvenienced.
This
 would help your company maintain its well-deserved reputation. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. I hope you will take my comments into consideration. Yours sincerely, Nodirbek Abduqahhorov.
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I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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