Some people think that success is the best way to measure intelligence. Others believe that it can be measured through other useful parameters. Do you agree or disagree?

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Thinking with own mind is one of the most powerful tools human

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, it is important to split how humans can think in two different ways, the rational and

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instinctive behaviour of the human being,

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I want to highlight how intelligence is deeply related to thinking, both rational and irrational, and

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create the starting point for success.

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a strong mindset in our

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, which are given by a rational way of thinking, and in our

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there are a lot of distractions that can deviate from

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path. The second reason to support my idea is related to the feelings a human being can develop, which

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are connected to the irrational part of people.

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, a good relationship with

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can enhance in an excellent way job performances, developing possible

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he/she has to focus his/her attention on thinking to plan

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thinks in

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direction is connected to intelligence, more intelligent a person is, more extraordinary is his/her

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reaching out the success.

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

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Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

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Relevant & specific examples

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Fully explain your ideas

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