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As well as making money, businesses also have social responsibilities. Do you agree or disagree?

#money #businesses #responsibilities
It is the case that people have different opinions about
businesses
 should not only produce profits but
also
 be responsible for society. In my view, I completely agree with
this
 point and will give some reasons below. There are some important reasons for
companies
 to make
money
.
Firstly
, if
companies
 make
money
, they can pay more taxes.
As a result
, governments can use these taxes to spend on hospitals,
schools
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 for their citizens.
Secondly
,
businesses
 that make
money
 can expand their products and markets.
Therefore
, more jobs may be provided for people leading their life to get better.
Besides
 the importance of making
money
, it is true for
companies
 to involve in social responsibilities. One main reason is that
businesses
 must not harm the environment.
For example
, many factories are factors causing global warming
due to
 factory emissions and responsible disposal of waste. Another reason is
businesses
 that make profits should put
money
 back into the community through charity and final scholarships. By doing
this
, there are more students who may continue their studies and become professional workers, resulting in a more skilled-full
labor
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labour
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 force for
companies
.
For instance
, Unilever and Vinamilk are
businesses
 giving thousands of scholarships to poor children every year, thereby they may find good jobs in their futures in order to support their low-income families. In conclusion, I personally support the idea that
companies
 need to make
money
 to develop their business, they
also
 take responsibility for building a better society by protecting the environment and doing charity.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Social responsibilities
  • Corporate social responsibility
  • Ethical behavior
  • Societal impact
  • Stakeholders
  • Profit-driven
  • Public perception
  • Environmental sustainability
  • Community development
  • Human rights
  • Workplace safety
  • Altruism
  • Balanced approach
  • Accountability
  • Consumer loyalty
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