Some think schools should rewards students who have the best academic results, while others think it’s more important to reward students who achieve other types of success (such as sports, music, and good behavior). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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There are two opposite views related to rewarding

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,one says it is better to praise the one with excellent results

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one focuses on praising

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who achieve success in sports, music and other good manners.In

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would be discussing both views with some examples.

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with, a rewarding system plays a vital role in the mental development of learners making crucial milestones for their future progress.From the kindergarten prizing a candidate with a good academic score had been the trend. Most schools and colleges award the toppers of the classes.

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provide scholarship programmes ,especially for the subject toppers

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distinction holders.

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, St Xavier school provides full scholarships to the topper of the class for the whole academic year. I strongly agree that it is beneficial to

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and it motivates them

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making them hungry for success again and again. ,

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there are opposite views which recommend rewarding

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different fields rather than academic ones.I think it is a good idea

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the academic results should be given more priority and side by side extra-curricular activities should be promoted and rewarded.For

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schools can organize ECA competitions periodically which refresh the mind of the children and add to their academic qualifications too. To give an example an article was published in "The Himalayan Times" which says rewarding the student in sports and music had drastically uplifted the grades of the same

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with flying colours in academics including

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extracurricular activities like sports music and a few others

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Topic Vocabulary:

Scholastic achievement
Intellectual effort
Merit-based
Academic excellence
Educational outcomes
Well-rounded development
Multiple intelligences
Fosters self-esteem
Extracurricular involvement
Personal growth
Holistic approach
Diverse talents
Societal implications

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Some think schools should rewards students who have the best academic results, while others think it’s more important to reward students who achieve other types of success (such as sports, music, and good behavior). Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

People can eat a wide variety of food that can be grown in other areas. As a result, people eat more food produced in other regions than local food. Do you think the advantages of this trend outweigh the disadvantages?

You recently stayed at your friends's place to look after the house while he/she is away. you accidently damaged something in his/her house. write a letter to your friend. in your lettter you should describe what the accident was explain when it happened. suggest how you damage can be fixed.

Topic: Some people say that poor students or students who come from rural areas often find it difficult to have access to university education. What should be done to solve this problem? 250 words.