The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

The charts below show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.
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represents
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the figures
of
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graduate and postgraduate
students
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remained
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who remained
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without
full-time
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a full-time
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position after finishing
their
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college in
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the UK
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around 2008.
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, it's evident that patterns for both categories are similar.
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,
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study was considered to be the most important option,
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voluntary
work
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was the least popular one. In 2008,
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further
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study
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estimated 29,665 graduate UK
students
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, being almost three times higher than the figure
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part-time
work
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.
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, the former for postgraduates was 2,725 people,
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number of
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picked
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part-time
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was 2535, being almost the same. Unemployment and voluntary
work
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were similar for both types of
students
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.The figure for
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study accounted for
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part of
student
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number,
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vuluntary
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voluntary
work
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, being the least popular choice, comprised only one-sixth of the total amount.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "further, while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words students, work with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Graduate
  • Postgraduate
  • Full-time work
  • Further education
  • Part-time work
  • Unemployment
  • Volunteering
  • Traveling
  • Gap year
  • Career progression
  • Job market
  • Transition
  • Academic life
  • Professional sphere
  • Economic factors
  • Social factors
  • Financial crisis
  • Long-term impact
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