The bar charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

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represents

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data about four types of occupation of

graduate

or postgraduate

students

that did not have a qualified

work

by finishing college in 2008. It’s notable

from

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the

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first glance that

both

students

preferred mostly

futher

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further

study, and

that

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figure of

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student

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is much more than postgraduate

students

. The most unpopular option among

both

students

was voluntary

work

, making up 3500

graduate

students

and only 345 postgraduate

students

Other

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two destinations (

further

work

, unemployment) are the same

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both

students

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choices,

however

postgraduated

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postgraduate

post graduated

students

most likely select part-time

work

while

graduate

students

are not keen on

this

occupation.

Part time

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work

among postgraduate people was almost as popular as

further

study, having about 200

students

difference.

Further

study and unemployment were samely popular for

both

students

by proportion , just as voluntary

work

, figures of these 3 destinations among

postgraduated

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postgraduate

postgraduates

post graduated

are 10 timed less between

graduate

students

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4Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

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The bar charts show what UK graduate and postgraduate students who did not go into full-time work did after leaving college in 2008.

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

In the modern world, people no longer need to use food or products from animals, such as medicine and clothing. Do you agree or disagree with that statement?

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