The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.

The diagram illustrates the process that is used to manufacture bricks for the building industry.
The diagram represents the manufacturer of
bricks
which are used for the building industry.
Overall
, it can be seen that the process by which the brick
are
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manufacturing
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. It is a multistep linear process. It consists of three stages
such
as collecting the
bricks
and end up with transporting these. In the first stage,
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metal grid is collected from the clay by using the digger and
then
the metal grid is poured into the roller where the sand will be washed through the water. After
washingbthe
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washing the
metal grid , it will be turned into
bricks
by using
wire
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cutter and the
bricks
is
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designed by the mould. In the second stage, all the
brick
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have to dry in the oven which name is kiln for 24 to 48 hours where the
bricks
will dry in three stages
such
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as the
bricks
will be heated
in
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200c - 980c in moderate temperature. After
sometimes
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some time
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the temperature has to increase
in
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870c - 1300c and
then
off the heating process and the
bricks
have to keep
then
in
cooling
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chember
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chamber
chambers
for 48 to 72 hours again. In the
last
and final stage, the
bricks
is
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packaged for delivery.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "such".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bricks, c with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • diagram
  • manufacture
  • bricks
  • building industry
  • process
  • dig
  • prepare
  • clay
  • mold
  • shape
  • dry
  • fire
  • kiln
  • cool
  • package
  • fired
  • overview
  • importance
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