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Some people prefer to travel around town by car, while others prefer public transit such as bus, tr vocabulary orain, or subway. Discuss both these positions and give your own opinion.

In the contemporary world, there are several kinds of
transport
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 which most
people
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 have some choices in order to go somewhere. Some individuals choose a
car
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 to travel around the city
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;
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on the other hand
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, the rest of them take a tour by
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. In
this
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 situation, both sides have reasons to choose
this
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 public
transport
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and
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, and
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 I am going to explain it. There are an abundance
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of
people
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 who
use
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 individual
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such
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 as cars
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 and motorcycles because it has plenty of benefits.
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, when
people
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use
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 a
car
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 to take a
journey
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journey,
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 they
enable
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 to arrive where they are going,
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,
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this
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 kind of travelling is much more comfortable than public transit.
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, only these
people
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 can go around any city that can afford its requirements, because, at
this
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 time,
transport
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 fuel
such
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 as petrol is more expensive
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due to
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this
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reason
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reason,
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 most
people
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 can not take a tour by
car
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. Public
transports
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are
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 most common, and the majority of individuals prefer to go by bus, train and subway. In our daily life, when
people
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 go to work or school, they will especially
use
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 these kinds of
transport
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 because it is cheaper than
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individual one and sometimes it can be as comfortable as a
car
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.
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, it is obvious that these types of transit
have
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also have
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also
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 negative sides.
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, it has a tough time at midnight and morning, and sometimes if someone wanted to get on the bus, they would not be able to do it.
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, there are various
amounts
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types
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 of transportation
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to travel somewhere
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 at the same time, some of them choose to travel by
car
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who
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, who
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 can afford to buy
its
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petrol
and
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, and
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 the rest of them go for to
use
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 public transit
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as well as
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both
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Both
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 types of
transport
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 have negative sides.

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overall
Be clear about your view. Say which transport you think is best and why.
structure
Make one clear plan. Start with a short intro, then two body parts for both sides, then a short conclusion that gives your view.
language
Use short, easy sentences. Check for word order and small grammar errors.
content
The essay tries to discuss both sides.
content
Shows some points on cost and ease of use for each option.
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