Sending criminals to prison is not the most effective method to deal with crime. Education and job training should be used instead. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Society
has
it's
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rules and those who break
it
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are punished.
However
, some believe that
prison
sentences
are not at all effective and
instead
, criminals should be educated and trained to reform them. In
this
essay, I will discuss why
this
point holds true in some cases and why it doesn't in others.
Due to
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impartiality, condemning criminals to
a
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a prison sentence
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prison
sentences
is not ideal. Prisons
are be
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very harsh and unforgiving. Those who go there might not learn how
adhere
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to rules and
Instead
, learn to fear them. A person sent to
prison
for a trivial crime, stealing a loaf of bread
for instance
, might be committed to a life of imprisonment when the action might not be so severe.
Furthermore
, once released, the same person would not be able to
aclimate
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acclimate
to modern
society
when they have been behind bars for a long time. Not only that,
prison
cells can be a large money sink. Governments have to invest large funds towards
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maintainence
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maintenance
when it could be used for better infrastructure
instead
. Educating and training culprits is far more useful in reforming them and making them useful members of
society
.
On the other hand
,
prison
sentences
are a useful tool in
mainting
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maintaining
order. Few actions are so heinous that there is no other alternative. Some criminals are so far gone that they would be a danger to
society
,
for
example
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a serial killer, and long
punishement
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punishment
is the only way to keep others safe.
Prison
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also
remind
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reminds
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others that actions have consequences and deter those who think of
comitting
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committing
a crime. In conclusion,
prison
sentences
are not always pretty but are needed in cases where there are no options.
However
, these punishments should not be used as
an
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way out and
instead
of banishing
covnicts
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convicts
, we should try to rehabilitate them.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • criminal behavior
  • reintegration into society
  • recidivism rates
  • breeding ground
  • cost-effective
  • cycle of poverty and crime
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