The chart below shows the number of men and women (in thousand) in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying full-time or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The graph chart illustrates how male and female
students
completed further
education
either full time
or part-time in Britain in three different Add a hyphen
full-time
era
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eras
which
namely 1970-71, 1980-81 and 1990-91.
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apply
Overall
, it is clear that
the portion of part-time educational students
was significantly higher than in both gender categories. Noticeably, the number
of female learners were gradually emerged
year by year.
For male Change to the active voice
gradually emerged
emerged
students
, precisely about 1000 students
were learning part-time during 1970-1971 which declined by roughly 150 students
after two decades passed. On the other hand
, the year 1980-81 had the least number
of students
in full-time education
and only about 80 students
were in full-time education
in 1970/71. Additionally
, this
number
grew 40
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by 40
students
per decade and from 120 to over 200 male students
in 1990- 1991.
Meanwhile, the amount of part-time female students
was starting with
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at
startling
pace in 1970-1971 and there was only below 50 in full-time Correct article usage
a startling
education
. Later, the quantity of female full-time learners was raising slightly in 1980 but the amount part-time
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of part-time
education
rocketed to the
830. Correct article usage
apply
Lastly
, the number
of female part-time students
climbed consistently to the 1200 however
there was a slightly
drop in the full-time female learners.
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slight
According to
the graph, the
full-time Correct article usage
apply
further
education
was not popular in both gender categories. To summarize, the number
of female students
was raising substantially compared to the male students
within three decades.Submitted by thant2356zin on
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