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The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing houswork in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The first line chart presents the percentage of households with
electrcal
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electrical
 appliances, and the latter one illustrates the number of
hours
 of housework per week.
Overall
, the more electrical items
people
 had, like washing machines, refrigerators and vacuum
cleanners
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cleaners
, the less time they spent on
housechores
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house chores
. The time
people
 spent on
houseworks
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housework
 was incredibly 50
hours
 in 1920, and it had seen a significant decrease by 1960 by 30
hours
. After that, it remained relatively stable for the following 60 years,
that is
 approximately 10 to 20
hours
 per week.
It is clear that
 there are highly relevant between the possession of electrical
appliacnes
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appliances
 and the time
people
 spent on
housechores
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house chores
. In 1920, only
few
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a few
show examples
part
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parts
show examples
 of
people
 had washing
machine
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machines
show examples
,
refrigerator
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refrigerators
show examples
 and vacuum
cleanner
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cleaners
, and the proportion of having a washing machine was the
primaty
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primary
 at 40%.
However
, in 2019, almost everyone had
refrigerator
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a refrigerator
show examples
 and vacuum
cleanner
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cleaner
cleaners
 in their house, and the percentage of washing
machine
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machines
show examples
also
 climbed to 75%.
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