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Some people think it's better to choose friends who always have the same opinions as them. Other people believe it's good to have friends who sometimes disagree with them. Discuss both these views arid give your own opinion.

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Friendship is nothing but a confluence of souls with like-minded
demeanour
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. Opinions differ as to whether people should prefer
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 who perpetually agree with them or ought to select
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 who sometimes have different opinions. I believe that a true
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 is a person
who
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 both appreciates and criticises a
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 when needed. Many people believe that
friends
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 always adhere to their
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’
view
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. They argue that
friends
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 should have like-minded
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 relating to worldview, fashion,
the
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 paradigm of thought, to mention but a few,
otherwise
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 the friendship may be at stake. In simple words, if two
friends
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 explain a phenomenon from a different
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 of view, it may cause a hostile situation, which in turn harms the friendship.
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, Eddie and Sam, two of my college
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,
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were good
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 but drifted away
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 they were very judgmental
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 each other. So, a true
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 encourages his
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, supports his
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 unconditionally, and tolerates his
friend
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’s limitations regardless of the situation.
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, some people steadfastly opine that
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 sometimes differ
with
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 their
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. They go on arguing that
friends
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 should critically support their
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friend
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. To put it another way, a genuine
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 ought to help his
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 by identifying the merits and demerits of a decision his
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about
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 to make. In my humble opinion, a genuine
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 does not always support his
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. We all have some faults. So, a real
friend
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 should address his
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’s flaws so that he can overcome his limitations. A very good example is my
friend
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, named Arnold. He always identifies my mistakes in a mindful fashion.
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, a toxic
friend
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 always supports his
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due to
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 his ulterior motive. In conclusion, it seems reasonable to assume that a genuine
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 is someone who points
at
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 flaws
as well as
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 praises
for
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good works. So, we should choose a
friend
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 who encourages us and objectively criticise us when necessary.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • bond
  • support
  • unconditional love
  • shared values
  • mutual understanding
  • trust
  • emotional well-being
  • interdependence
  • societal norms
  • companionship
  • loyalty
  • advice
  • experiences
  • mentorship
  • trustworthy
  • reliable
  • reliable
  • cherish
  • strengthen
  • deepen
  • attach importance to
  • prioritize
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