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Some people think reading stories in books is better than watching TV or playing computer games. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is often thought that reading
stories
 in
books
more
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 essential than watching TV or other playing games on technological devices. In my opinion, I strongly agree that reading
stories
 in
books
 is very beneficial for
children
. A good reason why reading
stories
 in
books
are
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the best way for
children
 is that they will develop their language
skills
 compared to watching TV and playing games.
In other words
, when
children
 spend a lot of time
in
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reading
stories
books
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and books
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, they will
exposed
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 to a wide range of
vocabularies
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as well as
 sentence structures.
As a result
, reading
stories
 could provide great opportunities for
children
 to improve their vocabulary level, which can
be
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lead their better writing
skills
. Another point to consider is that reading
stories
 assist
children
 in their daily life communication.
That is
 to say, many parents suffer from their
children
 because of their lack of understanding with people or sometimes at school, so they prefer to make
children
 read
stories
 in
books
 in order to have great knowledge for the ability to speak clearly and understand others.
For instance
, when
children
 read
stories
such
 as
,
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 a book on how to deal with others or a book about society,
this
give
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children
positive
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 opportunity to communicate with others confidently.
Finally
, it is obvious that by reading
stories
 from different kinds of
books
,
children
 can easily gain advantages which are essential for their behaviour and development.
In addition
, reading one book per day may expand their mind and improve their
skills
 in order to prepare for their abduction in the future.
Therefore
, just only by reading habits,
children
 can confidently gain great success in their lives without any problems related to the lack of knowledge or shortage of
skills
. To reiterate, reading
stories
 in
books
 often can make
children
 become better individuals than depending on technology as
habit
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.
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