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Write a letter to your friend and invite him to a trip

Dear Hiva, How're e you? How's it going? What's up? Everything is OK?I hope things are fine whit you.Guess what.I want to go on a
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 letter to invite you to
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 journey. I'
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 going on a
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 around the country in my personal car for fifteen days.I think it will be a fantastic
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 with a lot of new experiences
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 I decide to sleep in a tent under a clear sky on some nights
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 we can see elegant sunrise at the beginning of day in the addition I'
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 going to visit local restaurants because of delicious foods
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 going to cook kebab, eggs and sausage.I'
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 going to stay near the lake and sit in a chair under the sky
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 we can see the stars
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 we can swim in the lake and relax.I'
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 gonna visit local people and make communication with them
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 we can find out about their culture so it will be a new experience for us.
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 gonna take a lot of pictures from our journey and put them on my Instagram page.I wanna
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trip
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 gonna be dreamy and exciting. I want you to join me for
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trip
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 you need to bring something with you
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 as your sleeping bag and personal things and some drinks.You need to have warm clothes because of cold nights and don't forget to pack comfortable clothes.Take sandals and a bat.Why don't you take some beer😊 it's a good idea. Don't forget you should be here
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 Friday before 6 P.
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 as I need help preparing travel equipment. I'
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 looking forward to your exception (answer). Best wishes, Hamid.

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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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