Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers, while others believe that students' attitudes are important. Discuss both and give your own opinion

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the most
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life
. Many
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that the progress in
study
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of a student
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higly
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depends on better educators
while
others think that
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students'
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behaviour
also
matters.
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both notions and will provide
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opinion. On the one hand, those who
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that teachers
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a big role in
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the successful
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edcational journy
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educational journey
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students
have many reasons.
Firstly
, educators are the second person after the parents that
students
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things from.
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really
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important
imports
for
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schools to
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hire
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a person with great abilities.
Secondly
, the
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, care and motivation provided by the academics will
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a significant influence on
students
.
lastly
, teachers should be held creative events to make them
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and
making
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a clear intention to grow
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further
in
the
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future studies.
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,
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it is
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important to have
best
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tutor for every child.
On the other hand
,
students
behavior
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behaviour
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and intentions
also
plays
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a vital role in their success. Many
students
who belong to
previlage
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privilege
privileged
families are not worried about their
life
goals.
For instance
, some of them are just studying to please their parents and
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relatives
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.
Moreover
, many
others
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students
have financial
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problems
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which led them to compromise
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their priorities associated with
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their career
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career
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careers
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. In
additions
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to
this
, some do have
interest
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an interest
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in sports so they
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not pay much attention in classes.
For example
, famous
india
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Indian
India
cricketer Virat Kohli has just done schooling he never attended tertiary education in his
life
though he is successful in his
life
.
Therefore
, student attitude and interest towards their study
plays
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a vital role in their
academis
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academic
growth. In conclusion, I
belive
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believe
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that having a better educator is key to success for
students
, and
also
their interest and problems
also
affects
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their career goals.
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