Some people believe that educational success depends on good teachers, while others believe that students' attitudes are important. Discuss both and give your own opinion

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of a student

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higly

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matters.

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educational journey

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students

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have many reasons.

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, educators are the second person after the parents that

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schools to

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a person with great abilities.

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a significant influence on

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future studies.

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its

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tutor for every child.

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students

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behavior

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and intentions

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plays

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a vital role in their success. Many

students

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who belong to

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privilege

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goals.

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, some of them are just studying to please their parents and

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students

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have financial

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which led them to compromise

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their priorities associated with

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their career

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, some do have

interest

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in sports so they

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not pay much attention in classes.

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india

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cricketer Virat Kohli has just done schooling he never attended tertiary education in his

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though he is successful in his

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, student attitude and interest towards their study

plays

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a vital role in their

academis

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academic

growth. In conclusion, I

belive

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that having a better educator is key to success for

students

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, and

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their interest and problems

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affects

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their career goals.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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