In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that their products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative development?

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that more and more commercials are made to promote that the products are new
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their sense of superiority complex. And I think the drawback of that trend overtakes the benefits.
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the reason for
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a negative development.
This
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the superiority complex of consumers. Because human beings have competitiveness, they can purchase something updated and attractive to show off to their friends or relatives.
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a commercial is a vital method to trigger customers to purchase the up-to-date version. Once
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those companies drop these advertisements to the right target audience, the sale of that will see a
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increase at large.
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to publish several advertisements to elaborate
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revolutionary functions
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brand new
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iPhone
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successful strategy.
However
, as far as I am concerned, that will lead to the waste of resources, both financial and natural. Consumers may spend too much money buying a new version
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for emotional
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satisfaction
, even though the old one still works well. What's more, the companies will exploit more natural
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resources
to
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manufacture
their products. Unfortunately, that will lead to
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incresing
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increasing
amount of garbage and disastrous outcome for the environment.
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trash, which is delivered to those developing countries, seriously pollute their mountains or beaches and threaten the local people's health. In conclusion, even though the action to promote
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version of
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seems to be an effective commercial method to boost the profit.
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long term
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because
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is unrecoverable.
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  • Innovation
  • Fast-paced
  • Distinguishing
  • Psychological aspect
  • Inherently
  • Perceived
  • Continuous improvement
  • Revolutionary
  • Feasible
  • Throwaway culture
  • Undervalue
  • Longevity
  • Obscure
  • Novelty
  • Unsatisfactory
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