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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a fmily for six months and look after their six-year old child.

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Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Sai Nay Lin from Myanmar. I was browsing through some of the magazines recently and I stumbled upon your advertisement in one of the Australian magazines that you are looking for a live-in babysitter who would look after your child who is six years old. As I previously had a similar experience when I was in a daycare facility as a volunteer for a year, I would like to apply for the vacancy. Since I am currently taking a gap year prior to University and I would love to look for new experiences which would broaden my horizon, the position you are looking for suits my intention perfectly. Given the fact that I was previously experienced in a day-care facility taking care of many children, I would positively say you will find satisfactory in my service. As I know that I would be allowed 1 rest day per week, I could spend time around the city or visiting some of the museums as I am very fond of history. I humbly thank you for sparing your precious time reading my letter and looking forward to hearing your kind response soon. Yours sincerely, Sai Nay Lin
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