In the past, most people used to travel to their place of work. with increased use of computers the Internet and smartphones more and more people are starting to work from home . what are the advantages and disadvantages of the yeast development you should use your own ideas knowledge and eperience and support your arguments with examples and relevant evidence.

In the past, workers had to commute to their workplace.
Nowdays
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beacuse
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because
of technology most
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people are freelancing.
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will discuss both advantages and disadvantages of
this
issue. People who are working in their
home
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by using
of
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smart devices
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have more time to schedule for daily life.
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playing with children,
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for a walk,
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their duty
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the
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home.
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by the
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of commuting traffic
jam
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specially
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in
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the metropolis
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metropolis
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can be controlled and the number of accidental injuries would be too decreased.
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these days people are overused of electronic devices, so there are many serious mental and body damages in
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society.
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by increasing
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freelancing,
face to face
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communication would be eliminated and
consequently
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the new generation won’t be able to be successful in contact skills. In conclusion, as I mentioned in
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essay, there are advantages and disadvantages to working at home and
overall
in my view the disadvantages would
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the advantages
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