You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is important to spend a lot of money on family celebrations. While others think it is a waste of money. Discuss both views. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.

There is no doubt that family is
main
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reason
of
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for
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development
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the development
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and growth of any society.Health relations between
indivduals
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individuals
will result in
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a health
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health
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healthy
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productive community. Recently, The importance of family parties and the amount of
money
spended
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spent
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in
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on
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these
event
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has now become more controversial with many
claim
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claiming
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that it is worth spending
while
other
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others
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reject
this
notion.
This
eassy
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essay
easy
will
illustrates
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both sides and their supporting
arguements
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arguments
. On
one
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the one
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side, the key and vital reason why people spend
huge
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a huge
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amount of
money
in
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on
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family celebrations is that these
event
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connect family members.
Moreover
, many
individual
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individuals
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in
family
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the family
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lives in
far
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the far
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area and rarely can join in
these event
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this event
these events
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.
Secondly
, family member memories
last
forever holding
alot
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a lot
of joyful moments.
Also
, building
strong
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a strong
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bond
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bonds
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between
indviduals
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individuals
.
In
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contrasting
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the contrasting
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side,one clear disadvantage
about
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of
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these gathering is that
alot
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a lot
of
money
is
spend
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in
short
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the short
a short
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period that
last
for
few
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a few
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hours.
Also
, many
family
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families
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take loans from banks and stay years in debt rather than spend
these
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this money
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money
on education or
esstenial
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essential
family needs. Not only
money
is wasted but
also
large
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a large
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amount of food is wasted.
For instance
, studied
conduct
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by
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the university
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university
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University
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of
jordan
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Jordan
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showed that more than 40% of food is wasted
in
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during
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these celebrations
that
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which
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could have saved many families who are facing food
shortage
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shortages
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. On balance, in my personal view,
althought
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although
these celebrations
last
years and years but spending
money
on vital fields is more
importance
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important
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. I
beliveve
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believe
that family members should meet up and enjoy time together to connect
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and bond
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bond
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bonds
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among its members in simple classic events.
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