You should spend about 40 minutes on this task. Write about the following topic: Some people believe that it is important to spend a lot of money on family celebrations. While others think it is a waste of money. Discuss both views. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 254 words.
There is no doubt that family is
main
reason Add an article
the main
of
Change preposition
for
development
and growth of any society.Health relations between Correct article usage
the development
indivduals
will result in Correct your spelling
individuals
Correct article usage
a health
health
productive community. Recently, The importance of family parties and the amount of Replace the word
healthy
money
Use synonyms
spended
Correct your spelling
spent
in
these Change preposition
on
event
has now become more controversial with many Fix the agreement mistake
events
claim
that it is worth spending Wrong verb form
claiming
while
Linking Words
other
reject Fix the agreement mistake
others
this
notion.Linking Words
This
Linking Words
eassy
will Correct your spelling
essay
easy
illustrates
both sides and their supporting Change the verb form
illustrate
arguements
.
On Correct your spelling
arguments
one
side, the key and vital reason why people spend Correct article usage
the one
huge
amount of Add an article
a huge
money
Use synonyms
in
family celebrations is that these Change preposition
on
event
connect family members.Change the determiner
events
Moreover
, many Linking Words
individual
in Change to a plural noun
individuals
family
lives in Correct article usage
the family
far
area and rarely can join in Add an article
the far
these event
. Change the determiner
this event
these events
Secondly
, family member memories Linking Words
last
forever holding Linking Words
alot
of joyful moments.Correct your spelling
a lot
Also
, building Linking Words
strong
Add an article
a strong
bond
between Fix the agreement mistake
bonds
indviduals
.
Correct your spelling
individuals
In
Change preposition
On
contrasting
side,one clear disadvantage Correct article usage
the contrasting
about
these gathering is that Change preposition
of
alot
of Correct your spelling
a lot
money
is Use synonyms
spend
in Change the form of the verb
spent
short
period that Add an article
the short
a short
last
for Linking Words
few
hours.Correct article usage
a few
Also
, many Linking Words
family
take loans from banks and stay years in debt rather than spend Change to a plural noun
families
these
Change the determiner
this money
money
on education or Use synonyms
esstenial
family needs. Not only Correct your spelling
essential
money
is wasted but Use synonyms
also
Linking Words
large
amount of food is wasted. Change the article
a large
For instance
, studied Linking Words
conduct
by Wrong verb form
conducted
Correct article usage
the university
university
of Correct your spelling
University
jordan
showed that more than 40% of food is wasted Change the capitalization
Jordan
in
these celebrations Change preposition
during
that
could have saved many families who are facing food Correct pronoun usage
which
shortage
.
On balance, in my personal view, Fix the agreement mistake
shortages
althought
these celebrations Correct your spelling
although
last
years and years but spending Linking Words
money
on vital fields is more Use synonyms
importance
. I Replace the word
important
beliveve
that family members should meet up and enjoy time together to connect Correct your spelling
believe
Correct word choice
and bond
bond
among its members in simple classic events.Fix the agreement mistake
bonds
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