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You have recently organized an event at a restaurant. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter: • Give details about the event and how it went; • Tell how you were pleased with the restaurant’s service; • Suggest some improvements the restaurant could make. Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear ....,

#event #restaurant #manager #restaurant’s #service #improvements #addresses
Dear Sir Burak: I am writing to thank you and your staff for making our event so special
last
 night. Actually, I made a reservation for fifteen people two days ago. We were excited about the fact that we could find tables for
such
 a large group, especially in
such
 a reputable restaurant. In fact, all of my guests had a great time
due to
 the tasty food, pleasant atmosphere, and perfect live musical performance. Each member of your staff was extremely attentive, reacted promptly to any requests, and was kind and friendly. The only thing that I would suggest changing in order to make everything even better is the air conditioning system. Unfortunately, the hall was airless and hot by the end of the evening, and some of my guests could not stay there. Thank you again for your work. We have been your regular clients since that day and will definitely attend your restaurant again. Yours sincerely, Sinan Y
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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