Environmental problems are too big for individual countries and individual people to address. We have reached the stage where the only way to protect the environment to address it at an international level. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
Living in the world we cannot set aside the problem
arises
about the Correct pronoun usage
that arises
environment
. Environmental is still big
concern for many Add an article
a big
countries
to cope with, even though the government
in any country have made the policy to address with big effort but the problems still not to be clear with
. Here, I believe that Change preposition
apply
government
should participate international state community to have a
communication with other Correct article usage
apply
countries
to solve the problems together.
To start with, in individual countries
Add a comma
,countries
government
is obligated to solve the issue
happening to satisfy the right of society
but the issue
that always pay
attention Change the verb form
pays
is
Change preposition
to is
Correct article usage
the environmental
environmental
. Replace the word
environment
However
, the society
itself still not to be aware about
the condition of Change the preposition
of
environment
, Add an article
the environment
for instance
, the pollution as the effect of using the carbon emission vehicle. In addition
, government
have made Add an article
the government
the
campaign to the community to look after the effect using carbon emission Correct article usage
a
while
it is not effective to address Correct word choice
but
with
all by itself.
Alternatively, Change preposition
apply
Government
in a particular country Correct article usage
the Government
who
still Correct pronoun usage
that
survive
to overcome the environmental Correct subject-verb agreement
survives
issue
, they
propose to have an international Correct pronoun usage
apply
organization
which allow
other Correct subject-verb agreement
allows
countries
to join in to enable the society
have
Fix the infinitive
to have
the
Correct article usage
an
awareness
of Replace the word
aware
environment
and make Add an article
the environment
the
big campaign as we know nowadays Correct article usage
a
such
as WWF (World wide fund nature) since having participation with international
Add an article
the international
an international
organization
, government
would get the more Add an article
the government
benefit
as the Replace the word
beneficial
organization
could influence the attention from society
To sum up
, I contend that it has a big opportunity to protect the environment
if government
have
collaboration with other Unnecessary verb
apply
countries
to address the issue
of environment
by joining the international Add an article
the environment
organization
that is
WWF that
would attract followers to be engaged.Correct pronoun usage
which
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