Today many people use the internet and smartphones to transfer money to friends, family, and business.
In present days,
majority
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the majority
population
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the population
are
using online transactions Correct subject-verb agreement
is
money
to their acquaintances. They doing this
process by harnessing digital technologies. I presume it is postive
development. Correct your spelling
positive
This
way of transferring is economically friendly and far more convenient in comparison with conventional
way.
To commence with, these days online banking Correct article usage
the conventional
are
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is
regulary
it is because Correct your spelling
regularly
this
way of transferring is economically friendly. The
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deforestation
people
cut down trees to manufacture paper products especially money
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for money
It is clear that
by using online money
people
could gradually adapt to online currency which is great
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a great
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saving
economy
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the economy
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,Secondly
this
method of transferring is more comfortable because of special offers and discounts. For example
, many companies trying to attract many customers to use their applications and therefore
they often give many cashbacks trying to involve and save clients. Thus
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and
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apply
as well as
environment.
Moreover
, online banking are
considerably faster than traditional banks. Change the verb form
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For instance
, people
who want to convey their money
by traditional
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the traditional
are have
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queues
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proccess
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process
huge
amount of time. Add an article
a huge
In contrast
, in online transactions
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,transactions
people
could send their money
instantly. Because online transferring
applications could do millions of transfers Replace the word
transfer
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at
a
same time and in a short amount of time. Correct article usage
the
Hence
, The importance of online banking pushing back the frontiers.
To conclude
, nowadays Many people
are using their devices to transfer their money
. This
method are
developing day by day because of its convenience and Change the verb form
is
benificial
impact Correct your spelling
beneficial
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on
environment
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the environment
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