The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.

The line graph shows the information average number of visitors entering a museum in summer and winter in 2003.

Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information shown below.
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The line graph illustrates the average
number
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of
visitors
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visiting a museum during summer and
winter
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in 2003. At first glance, it can clearly be seen that the majority of
visitors
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were in summer,
while
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the minority
in
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were in
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winter
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. First of all, the
number
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of clients in
winter
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began at zero and started to increase gradually reaching almost 600
visitors
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. After that, the
number
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fell suddenly reaching 400
visitors
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.
Then
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, the form kept changing significantly until standing at 600
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which was the highest
number
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during
winter
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over
this
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year.
On the other hand
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, the
number
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of
visitors
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declined sharply landing on less than 200 people and remained constant till the end of the year.
According to
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the
number
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of people visiting the museum in summer, it grew quickly from zero to more than 1200
visitors
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. Following that, it climbed reaching approximately 1600
visitors
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. Unfortunately, the digit dropped gradually ending at 800 people.
lastly
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, it went down rapidly reaching zero again.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words number, visitors, winter with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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