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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010.
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The table demonstrates the annual
milk
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production
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 of four countries, namely Tanzania,
Guatemala
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, Australia, and the
Netherlands
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 in the years 1990, 2000, and 2010.
Overall
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, the data reveals a significant increase in
milk
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production
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 for Tanzania and
Guatemala
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 during the given period. The
Netherlands
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 remained the top
milk
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 producer among the countries,
while
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Guatemala
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 recorded the lowest
milk
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production
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. Looking specifically at Tanzania and
Guatemala
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, Tanzania’s
milk
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production
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 rose from 87,000
litres
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 in 1990 to 155,000
litres
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 in 2010,
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Guatemala
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’s increased from 26,000
litres
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 in 1990 to 84,000
litres
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 in 2010. Despite these improvements, both countries still recorded the lowest
milk
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production
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 compared to Australia and the
Netherlands
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.
On the other hand
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, Australia’s
milk
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production
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 decreased noticeably between 1990 and 2010, from 11,246,000
litres
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 to 9,165,000
litres
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.
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,
milk
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production
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 in the
Netherlands
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 increased slightly from 11,262,000
litres
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 in 1990 to 11,466,000
litres
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 in 2010, which made it the biggest
milk
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 producer among the four nations.
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