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Your friend has been offered a place on a course at the university where you studied. He/She would like your advice about finding a place to live. Write an email to your friend. In your email - describe where you lived when you were a students at the university - recommend the best way for him/her to look for accommodation - warn him/her of mistakes students make when choosing accommodation Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Jenish, I'm happy to hear that you have been placed on a course at the
university
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 I studied.
I
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eager to help you about a finding a good place to live. I lived in a hostel near
to
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the
university
 when I was a student. It was taking five to ten minutes to reach the college and back to
hostel
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the hostel
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 from
college
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the college
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. My all friends lived there, and we liked
them
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their
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 services. If you want
ot
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to
 look for
places
 for living, I would recommend
to visit
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administration
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 office of the
university
. It contains a number of accommodation
places
 that are situated near to the college.
Moreover
, I can
also
 suggest
you
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to you
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 some best
places
 where you can find a lot of benefits compared to
that
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places
 which
university
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 suggested.
Furthermore
, I would like to address some problems that you see when you are choosing accommodation.
Firstly
, in some hostels, the electric bill is not counted in the final price, which is
wrong
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the wrong
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 thing.
Secondly
, the food of some hostels
are
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 very bad, and
due to
this
, students face some health issues. So, kindly please check these two problems. Once again I am happy to know that we are now meet
frequntely
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frequently
 in the future, and if you need any help please let me know. I am available
for
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 help you. Warmest regards,
Milav
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Milan
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