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It is thought by some that it is better to live in a city while others believe that life is better in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#city #life #countryside
It is undeniable that
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 technology development affects everyday life anywhere around the world.
People
 argue
which
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 is the better place for living
between
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a
city
 or
countryside
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the countryside
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. My perspective is that it would be better if we are surrounded by complete facilities in the
city
 to ensure that can help our daily life
be
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is
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 effective and convenient. Nowadays, there is a growth
of
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in
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 population and
people
 live in both cities and
countryside
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the countryside
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. Many
people
 argue that living in the
countryside
 is better.
However
, I believe that there are more advantages to living in the
city
. The main advantage of
countryside
 living is less pollution. There is no heavy industrial or complex transportation or any
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 activities that would provide toxic wastes, harmful chemicals or even tons of garbage to the communities.
Furthermore
, there are less
competitions
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 concerning work. Most occupations
would be
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 farmers, small entrepreneurs or shop store owners in a small
city
, even if the income is not too high but the expense is low compared to
city
 living.
Rural
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 environment appears to have low competitiveness so
that is
 why some
people
 prefer to live there.
However
, as there are technological and
also
 occupational changes,
this
 influences many
people
 to come to big cities. The
city
 now has many innovations including modern infrastructure and amenities to support all requirements to serve a crowded population. First of all, the complex transportation system connects all the dots around the
city
 to make it easier to commute
to
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downtown. Second of all, infrastructure like the internet
that
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can encourage work effectiveness, and
finally
, the number of hospitals in the
city
 can cure various symptoms that make
people
’s lives safer. In conclusion,
countryside
 living is suitable for individuals who seek
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 living and an environment with less pollution.
Nevertheless
, there are better ways to live in
city
 communities in the modern world because of convenience, work effectiveness and healthcare facilities.
As a result
,
this
 essay supports the idea that the
city
 is a better place for living.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • metropolitan
  • infrastructure
  • cosmopolitan
  • commute
  • sociocultural
  • prosperity
  • sustainability
  • rural
  • tranquility
  • urbanization
  • relocation
  • residential
  • populace
  • ecological footprint
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