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The plans below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

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The diagram given depicts the changes that occurred on the ground floor of a specific building over the span of time .
Overall
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 , it can be seen that the function of the floor has shifted over time , starting as an office
then
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 being an
apartment
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 and
finally
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 ending as a flower shop ,
however
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 , the kitchen and the entrance have always remained in the same position over the period ,
whereas
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, other rooms have been shifted . First , in the transition from an office to an
apartment
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 a lot of changes have been witnessed in the floor structure, with both the meeting room and the manager's office turning into a living room and a bedroom respectively , the toilet
on the other hand
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 , saw a small change with the addition of a shower to it when turned into an
apartment
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.
Second,
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becoming a flower shop
instead
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 of an
apartment
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, it can be noticed that bedroom 2 and the living room
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 the bathroom and shower have been replaced to become spaces that hold the flowers ,
also
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, adding a gift shop and a play area .

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