More and more adults have continued to live with their parents for many years after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages of this choice outweigh disadvantages?

It is often argued that

adult

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adults

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should stay individually and pursue a career once they completed their tertiary education rather than staying with

parents

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their parents

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as to whether it is a blessing or curse, there arises a heated debate among people. As far

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concerned, I personally feel that despite staying individually can learn to be an independent person, but the drawbacks shouldn’t be denied.

Adult

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can be independent by staying alone compared

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staying with their family.

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, I’m currently studying abroad so I must manage my own daily matters independently without receiving any help from my family members and

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eventually improved my time management skills at well.

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, some people decided to refuse a job offer in the urban area and

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to accept a placement offer in

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area

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the concern of family. Sadly to say, they have to face a reality fact

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as low

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and

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welfares

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being offered in the

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areas compared to the city.

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there are certain drawbacks,

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its multifold advantages shouldn’t be denied. Staying together not only can improve the relationship between family members but

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the

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can always look after the elderly. I personally think that as an adult, we must take the responsibility to take good care of our parents because they have been taking good

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on us since we were small. Moving forward, sometimes parents require extra attention from kids to prevent them from feeling neglected

and

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lead

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to certain health conditions.

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, NHS Medicine has recorded that

elderly

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the elderly

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who are staying alone

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to be isolated and

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a higher prone

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diagnosing Alzheimer’s disease. In conclusion,

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the examples and arguments given, I personally feel that family members should be prioritized and couldn’t compared with other

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.

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, I would agree that the advantages of staying with family definitely outweigh the disadvantages.