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In many workplaces, online communication is becoming more commonplace than face-to-face meetings. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#workplaces #communication #meetings
Nowadays, people get used to adapting online
communication
 to approach the purpose of
meetings
. Online
communication
 becomes easy to do in preference to do
soffline
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offline
meetings
.
Nevertheless
, conducting face-to-face outweigh the benefits of network
communication
 as the system is more transparent and credible.
According to
 my opinion, online conversation has more merits than offline approach. To start with,
communication
 which is performed by network connection is the future which every
company
 has to adapt with.
In addition
, talking via
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the internet
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internet
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 platform is time efficient and straightforward in time management
instead
of
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traditional
meetings
. To elaborate, employees in the workplace do not need to travel,
however
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 they can create a virtual room for attending a meeting without encountering
at
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the place.
Moreover
, online
communication
turn
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 into mandatory
to
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for
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 every
company
 since it allows the
company
 to reduce expenses or costs of doing a meeting and
also
 it is flexible in doing so.
In contrast
, online
meetings
also
 have an inferiority even though they have an advantage,
for instance
, a network problem
due to
 an unstable connection which the
company
 cannot avoid if happens.
Furthermore
,
company
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a company
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 that wants to
adapt
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adopt
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a
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apply
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communication
 by networking has to make a campaign to each
employee
 in order to educate the
employee
 to use
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the application
an application
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application
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applications
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 to make a meeting or
call
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calls
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,
nonetheless
, the educated
employee
 is still not advanced in operating
application
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applications
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 because they are not familiar with the today's technology.
To sum up
, making
communication
 with online platform give the convenience of doing a meeting but they
also
 have the negative effect which it could not set aside, though the system is well-prepared
such
 as an
employee
 who is not sufficient in operating technology.
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