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In many workplaces, online communication is becoming more commonplace than face-to-face meetings. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#workplaces #communication #meetings
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Nowadays, people get used to adapting online
communication
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 to approach the purpose of
meetings
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. Online
communication
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 becomes easy to do in preference to do
soffline
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offline
meetings
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.
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, conducting face-to-face outweigh the benefits of network
communication
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 as the system is more transparent and credible.
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 my opinion, online conversation has more merits than offline approach. To start with,
communication
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 which is performed by network connection is the future which every
company
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 has to adapt with.
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, talking via
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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 platform is time efficient and straightforward in time management
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of
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traditional
meetings
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. To elaborate, employees in the workplace do not need to travel,
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however
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 they can create a virtual room for attending a meeting without encountering
at
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the place.
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, online
communication
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turn
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 into mandatory
to
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for
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 every
company
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 since it allows the
company
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 to reduce expenses or costs of doing a meeting and
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 it is flexible in doing so.
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, online
meetings
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also
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 have an inferiority even though they have an advantage,
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, a network problem
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 an unstable connection which the
company
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 cannot avoid if happens.
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,
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company
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a company
the company
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 that wants to
adapt
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adopt
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a
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apply
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communication
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 by networking has to make a campaign to each
employee
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 in order to educate the
employee
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 to use
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the application
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application
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applications
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 to make a meeting or
call
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calls
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,
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, the educated
employee
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 is still not advanced in operating
application
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applications
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 because they are not familiar with the today's technology.
To sum up
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, making
communication
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 with online platform give the convenience of doing a meeting but they
also
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 have the negative effect which it could not set aside, though the system is well-prepared
such
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 as an
employee
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 who is not sufficient in operating technology.
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