Some people think government is wasting money on arts subject in schools and that the money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do you agree with this view.

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Some people think that,
arts
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subject
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it
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apply
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is not
importent
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important
for our kids. I
compltly
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completely
disagree
for
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many
resonse
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responses
.
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art
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is one of our
cultsure
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cultures
.
Second,
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art
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has a big history from the old past
untel
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until
now.
Finally
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,
alot
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a lot
of
community
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communities
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use
the
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art
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as a job so, in
this
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caes
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case
cases
government should
spent
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money on them because
thay
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they
will lose
thier
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their
jobs.
On the other hand
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,
i
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can say
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the covernment
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covernment
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government
must have
limitetion
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limitation
limitations
to
spent
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spend
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on
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arts
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the arts
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. For
instense
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instance
, 5% of the income goes to
arts
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subject
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subjects
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.
Art
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can
helps
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help
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the country in money in many ways.
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, there
is
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are
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thousnds
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thousands
of people
visit
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the
musume
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museum
to watch the
art
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of that country.
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, the government should not cut the pay for
arts
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subject
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subjects
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.
Last
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but not
lest
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least
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,
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apply
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my
litlt
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little
brother has a
dreem
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dream
to
becom
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become
an artist in the
futsure
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future
, he always
thank
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his school
due to
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the fact that
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the covernment
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covernment
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government
governments
develop
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develops
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the
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apply
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art
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from the
subject
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. In conclusion, we should try as we can to improve the
art
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and keep it for the next generation.
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