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The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
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The two pictorial diagrams give information about
show
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how
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 an island,
that
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where
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 some visitors facilities were constructed , before and after.
Overall
,general change. Maps were changed
almost
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in almost
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 all
area
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areas
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.The major changes include pier, accommodation, restaurant and reception Actually,
map
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the map
a map
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 was almost empty. Trees were located on the east and west in the past. On the west had only
beach
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a beach
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.
Island
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The island
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 was covered by the sea. After, there have been lots of changes in order to increase tourist facilities. The pier was built for
tourist's
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tourists'
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 land. It creates for tourists lots of facilities that they can come by boat. Accommodation is constructed near
to
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apply
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reception. There have restaurants for visitors. It is situated above
of
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apply
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the reception. In summer visitors can
swimming
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swim
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 on
beach
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the beach
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.
Trees
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The trees
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in
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on
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 the map
is
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are
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 unchanged. Because trees make beautiful to
island
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the island
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. In order to make
comfortable
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it comfortable
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 there build
vehicle
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a vehicle
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 track.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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