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As countries develop, people tend to buy more and more cars. Do you think the advantages for the individual outweigh the disadvantages for the environment?

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Travelling by
car
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 has increasingly become popular in developing countries.
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,
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 has both negative and positive effects on the individual and society.
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 to have a great impact on the environment. There are many reasons why people choose to own a
car
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 rather than using public transport. One of them is the comfort that comes with driving to
work
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 in your own
car
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. Driving to
work
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 allows people to do
what ever
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whatever
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 they want without worrying about distracting others.
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, they can listen to any music
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high
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 volume and sing as loud as they can.
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 reason, most people are deciding to purchase
cars
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 for their freedom and comfort.
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, the growing number of automobiles continues to create great damage to the environment. Research indicates that pollution has doubled in the
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 10 years
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 the increase
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cars
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.
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 can be illustrated by observing the number of
cars
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 that families own. A family of five can have
atleast
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at least
 3
cars
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 parked on their driveways.
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, traffic is another issue being faced by users. It is hard to get to
work
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 earlier than expected because of too many road users.
Interestinly
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Interestingly
, even those who prefer
owing
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owning
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 a
car
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 are being affected by the
congetion
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congestion
condition
. To illustrate, workers need to allow about an hour
travel
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of travel
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 time;
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, they are more likely to get to
work
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 late. Buying more
cars
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 has caused major problems on modern roads
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 as poor air and
congetion
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congestion
. In summary,
although
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 there
are
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number
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a number
the number
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 of
advatanges
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advantages
 to
owing
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owning
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 a
car
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such
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 as comfort, the disadvantages
outweighs
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 them all. An increase in
cars
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 has caused environmental problems
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pollution
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as pollution
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 and unbearable traffic jams.
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