IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 4

In recent years, online education is becoming more and more popular. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this phenomenon? Use specific details and examples to explain your opinion.

#years #education #phenomenon
Nowadays, Studying online has become widespread.
This
 essay is going to show online education's benefits, which are accessibility of time and place and
courses
 from top schools, and drawbacks, which are technology Issues and lack of social interaction.
To begin
 with, since COVID-19 came
people
 have had to stay in their homes and isolated which is all institutes are closed many students must study online. At ,first it is difficult to learn from the screen but now everyone can learn online. It is very easy to access their class no matter when or where they are.
Thus
, online education has many
courses
 that
people
 can access not only from institutes near their homes but
people
 can access many
courses
 from universities and institutes they want to learn from.
On the other hand
, studying online comes with some equipment that
people
 need to use to connect to the server. Sometimes there is an error either from the user or the server, which makes us lose focus and too annoyed.
Moreover
, studying online makes recruitment lack social interaction which is
people
 unable to talk to
other admission
Change the wording
another admission
other admissions
show examples
. face to face and in the
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
end they are not close to each other. In conclusion, there are many benefits and drawbacks but in my ,opinion I believed that the disadvantages overweight their advantages.
Although
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 online classes can give enlistment extra time and many
courses
 to choose from, it will prevent the development of crucial soft skills and
also
 allow focus loss.
Submitted by taetae_ni1g on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Fully explain your ideas

To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: