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Smacking children is the best form of discipline. Discuss the extent to which you agree or disagree?

#children #form #discipline
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Nowadays, in many societies, people are concerned about beating
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 children at home.
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, others believe that smacking is
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 part of
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discipline
.
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is totally disagree
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 with the following statement. To
begining
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begin
, smacking
have
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negative
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a negative
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 impact
for
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person
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a person
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, not only
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child
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the child
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. The reason why,
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because
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 it is affect
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mental and physical health. On
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top of that, researchers made the investigation,
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correlation
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a correlation
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 between
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the feel
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 of happiness and
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harassment
 by parents.
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, most
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the
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children, have a
psyhology
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psychology
 therapy in adulthood. In my view, love and
kidness
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kindness
 are the best
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 to
raice
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raise
new
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 generation.
On the other hand
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, some parents
suppost
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support
 that, beating is a normal way to punish children. It can help them to follow their responsibilities.
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, after smacking, teenagers start to think about their actions and
consequnces
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consequences
. They became more
carefull
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careful
 with their statements. In conclusion, beating may be
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one of the
form
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 of child raising. But, in my eyes, I strongly believe that physical punishments have only drawbacks.
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