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Nowadays, distance-learning programs have gained popularity, but some people argue that online courses can never be as good as those taken at a college or university in person. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Some people
diffirentiated
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differentiate
differentiated
 attending classes at university is better for the people who study than taking online classes. I agree that having a presence at school is way greater because
this
 is
more
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recommended to learn a different branch of knowledge.
Firstly
,
instructor
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the instructor
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 will be more
focus
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 on teaching because
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he
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 does not
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an
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the
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internet
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 to communicate. Since communicating to
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 is a huge help for
students
 to improve their skills and they will guide them to aim
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.
Also
, they will help each and
everyone
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 to concentrate inside the room.
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,
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time
 by giving them a task related to the topic, they become creative
on
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 making ideas with the other groups.
Additionaly
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Additionally
,
execept
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except
the
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 teachers,
students
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while
 inside the school because all devices they needed are provided already and it
easier
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 for them to do the task.
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this
 instrument, will be
hassle
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a hassle
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 free and they can do other activities to finish before
deadline
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the deadline
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. Most of the
students
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on
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time
 management,
hence
 there is a rule that
be
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 on
time
attending
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 classes.
This
 will be a solution for them to be
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responsible in their schedule. Morning preparation is one of the
reason
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 why they are always in
rush
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 and did not get a chance to get in
time
.
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Furthermore
, many sports
such
 as lawn tennis
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cannot be accomplished online because it needs an open field to practice and play
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this
, where the
students
needs
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an
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assistance
form
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trainor
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trainer
 to
no
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 get injured
while
 doing the sports. To end, even though the school offer a lot of options, the traditional style of learning is incomparable and the people still got an opportunity to achieve their goal.
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