Nowadays, not enough students choose science subjects in university in many countries. What are the reasons for this problem? What are the effects on society?
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society
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subjects
is complex
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the complex
process
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process
happens because students
have to learn a diversity of difficult subjects
, such
as math, physics, and chemistry. Students
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students
do not prefer science
subjects
is lack
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the lack
exposure
in school
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of exposure
in school
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students
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in university
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lack
of exposure
in school
are the main reasons why students
consequently
choose humanities subjects
in university
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science
subjects
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students
do not choose science
subjects
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In conclusion, complex learning process
and Fix the agreement mistake
processes
lack
of exposure
in school
are the main reasons lack
of students
choosing science
subjects
in university
while
problems
with environmental safety
and lack
of vacations are the
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