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Band 4.5

You have been studying English for several years in your own country, and feel that you would benefit from an eight-week intensive course for foreign students offered by a college in the south of England. Write a letter applying for a place on the course, stating your reasons for choosing this particular college.

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Dr Mrs Kamilova , I am writing to apply for
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 eight-week intensive
course
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foreign
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for foreign
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 students offered by a college in
the
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south England. I am 16 years old and I am a student
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at
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High
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a High
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 school in Kaniv, England. For some time I have been looking for a
course
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 in
English
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 at a higher level and
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 why I found
you
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course
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 very interesting. I have always been interested
I
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in
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 learning
English
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. As a student at a secondary school N-33 I passed on the
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 exam and I hold a certificate at A2 Level I have enjoyed my summer job
of
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as
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 a guide in
museum
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a museum
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 enormously.
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, I feel I need to expand my knowledge of
English
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 and improve my writing, reading and speaking skills. I believe that taking a place on the B1
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course
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 would enable me to
again
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gain
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 valuable knowledge.
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, it would give me the opportunity to stay with a host family and
have
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practice
in
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everyday
English
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. I would like to ask for more details on
this
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course
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. I would
also
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 be very grateful if you could inform me if there is
choice
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 of clubs provided by your college.
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, I would like to ask if I can pay for the
course
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 with a credit card. Please find enclosed a copy of my CV , giving
further
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 details of my educational qualifications
qualifications
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and qualifications
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. I hope that you will consider me for admission to the
course
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. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Sabrina Nazarova

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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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