The two charts provide data about two types of TV programmes watched by women and men and four separate age groups in Australia.

The two charts provide data about two types of TV programmes watched by women and men and four separate age groups in Australia.
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The two charts provide data about two types of TV programmes watched by women and men and four separate age groups in Australia. It is apparently seen that women tend to watch more
reality
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shows on television than men.
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, there is a high proportion of people over the age of 45 who watch the most
televison
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television
.
According to
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the first
chart
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,chart
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only thirty-five per cent of men are interested in
reality
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shows in comparison with those who watch game shows. A hefty seventy per cent of women choose
reality
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shows,
whereas
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the same proportion of individuals in the 45+ age group, but select
televison
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television
games.
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, there is a similarity between the percentages of people aged 16 to 24 who enjoy watching both programmes.
Three fifths
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Three-fifths
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per cent of individuals ages 25-34 like to watch
reality
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shows in comparison with the percentage of those who prefer game shows. The proportions of elderly people who watch both programmes are the same.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 100%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words reality with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "provide" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "data" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "comparison" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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