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The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The first chart below shows how energy is used in an average Australian household. The second chart shows the percentage of greenhouse gas emissions which result from this energy use. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The two pie charts depict the usage of
energy
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 for different purposes in an Australian home and the
greenhouse
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 gasses that are emitted from them respectively.
Overall
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, it can clearly be seen that heating constitutes a vast portion of the
energy
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 use in the house and water heating
also
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 accounts for a greater part of
greenhouse
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 gas emissions. It is evident that heating and water heating utilize the most power at 42% and 30 % respectively.
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 is followed by other appliances which consume 15 % of
energy
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. Refrigeration which is the next records 7 % of the total
energy
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 consumption and lighting and cooling being the least at 2 % and 4% respectively. Water heating and other appliances ,
on the other hand
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, comprise more than half in terms of the production of
greenhouse
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 gasses at 32% and 28 % respectively.
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 is followed by refrigeration which is 14% of the total
greenhouse
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 gases produced. Heating is the next highest at 15 % with lighting and cooling being the least at 8% and 3% respectively. It can be noted that the proportion of
greenhouse
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 gas generated is greater than that of
energy
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 consumption

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words energy, greenhouse with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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