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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #reason #language #travel #work #country #someone
Some individuals believe that the only reason for acquiring training
on
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foreign
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a foreign
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language
 is to be able to migrate to and work in a foreign country.Others opine that there are more reasons
to
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this
 view.It seems to me that there are more reasons why
people
 should learn a new
language
,
this
 essay will discuss both views and my position in detail. On the one hand, learning a
language
that is
 not a person's local
language
 is essential in other to move and work outside their local environment.
This
language
 is needed so that
people
 can easily fit into the new environment and
to
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overcome communication
barrier
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.As a matter of fact,it will be difficult for an individual to live and work in a community with a strange
language
.
For example
,if an individual from Nigeria decides to travel to China,
such
person
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 needs to learn
Chinese
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language
 so that he can communicate and relate well with his new
neighbors
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.
On the other hand
,there are more reasons why
people
 should learn
new
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language
.
Firstly
,it
help
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helps
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 students to retrieve useful academic
informations
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information
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 that are written by foreigners on the internet.
This
 means of getting acquiring academic materials can go a long way for students that are studying foreign
languages
 in higher
institution
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institutions
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.
Secondly
,
leaning
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learning
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 a foreign
language
 helps an individual to appreciate and respect other
people
's
culture
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cultures
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 without the feeling of ethnocentrism.An individual with no knowledge
about
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others
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other
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languages
 may feel his own native tongue is superior and
this
 may lead to discrimination. In conclusion, it is presumed by some individuals that
people
 acquire a new
language
 because they want to travel and live abroad.I think that learning different
languages
 help
people
 to appreciate
others
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others'
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 culture.It
also
assist
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 students to get and make use
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of informations
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informations
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information
pieces of information
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 written in foreign
languages
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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