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Government of developing country should spend more on projects (eg new tourist hotel, factories) to improve local economy and less on facilities (eg health and education) To what extent do you agree or disagree

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Nowadays, a huge number of citizens make their own verdicts regarding the economic issue. When the head of the country, namely the
government
, wants to contribute more money to projects and less to facilities, the first part of individuals suggest
to agree
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 with the
government
,
however
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 the second part
make
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 their own verdict and
assume
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 that the most significant outcome will bring the contribution to both health and education fields. To delve into
this
 question, I would like to emphasise that I agree with the
government
 up to the point, notwithstanding there are many different drawbacks. On the one hand, it is essential to have
a
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success on the projects,
such
 as tourists hotel, factories and so on,
however
, if we are speculating about
this
 issue in a prospect, it is significant to add that without a good quality of education and without a qualitative level of medicine, there are no options for the country as to fail in the truly near future.
On the other hand
, it is vital to acknowledge that the most
perspective
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 option regarding the solution is to combine two fields, namely projects and facilities, and start to contribute the money to both of them. In my own opinion, the
government
 need to choose the most promising way in
this
 issue and provide an appropriate solution.
To conclude
, I would like to add that it is essential to elucidate every
government
's propositions regarding the
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 confusion, notwithstanding, most regrettably, it is evident that not every country's
government
 can make it properly.
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