Nowadays it is very popular to be technology/internet literate. Some people say that these skills will replace the use of books as main source of information and entertainment. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no doubt that these days a lot of people

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internet

in all

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fields

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modern world. The question is,

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the

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technology

will

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instead

of books and other sources of information? In

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agree

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disagree. In terms of

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side, Nowadays

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is the main source to research or make

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countries. The main reason given to support

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claim is that countries which have able to

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the

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are have

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research in

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30 years. To illustrate, Saudi Arabia between 2005 and 2019 made 200

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research

and 30

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on animals.

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has been

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the

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countries in

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developmnet

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development

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the

internet

will make our

live

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easier and faster to find

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informations

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the

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to find information or research will be faster because there are many methods to find it,

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, Google and Bing

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will find what you need just by

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, Nowadays entertainment with

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internet

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is easier compared to the past.

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you can watch many films in many ways.

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, Netflix and Youtube are the most

populer

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popular

website to watch. In conclusion,

Technology

make

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our

live

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easier and faster in many fields.

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government should take some steps to improve the

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and ensure

from

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the amount of safe in

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to make it

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and

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it by all of the ages adults, children and

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human

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. In my opinion, I believe that

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internet

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is one of the best inventions in the world.

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