This chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in new port city center from 2003 to 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

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The chart serves the data about the number of incidents happening in some particular places

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new port city centre from 2003 to 2012. In general, there were some kind of cases that were high in number in the early years

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one of them was low back

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. the similarity of trend happened in car theft and robbery,

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, they still have the difference in terms of

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. to be specific, in 2004, all the rates of crimes increased. the highest one was burglary with approximately 3900

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cases, and the lower one was robbery (800 cases).

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the other crimes kept increasing trend, car theft started to decrease in the following year (2800-2700) and continued until 2006 with 2000 incidents. in 2008, the crimes were falling down and two of them reached their lowest rates. the burglary constantly dropped to 1200 and the robbery fell to 500.

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, the incidents slightly rose even though the rates fluctuated.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

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Lexical resource: 6.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

changes
took place
three different areas of crime
New Port city center
from 2003 to 2012
summarise
information
selecting
reporting
main features
comparisons
where relevant
overall
crime rates
downward trend
most significant drop
observed
theft
burglary
on the other hand
slight increase
drug-related offenses
same period
declined steadily
significant decrease
10-year period
in contrast
slight decline
remaining years
violent crimes
relatively stable
slight fluctuation
conclusion
recorded
small increase
initially
then declined slightly

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