This chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in new port city center from 2003 to 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant

This chart below show the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in new port city center from 2003 to 2012. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant
The chart serves the data about the number of incidents happening in some particular places
inthe
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in the
new port city centre from 2003 to 2012. In general, there were some kind of cases that were high in number in the early years
while
one of them was low back
then
. the similarity of trend happened in car theft and robbery,
however
, they still have the difference in terms of
number
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. to be specific, in 2004, all the rates of crimes increased. the highest one was burglary with approximately 3900
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cases, and the lower one was robbery (800 cases).
while
the other crimes kept increasing trend, car theft started to decrease in the following year (2800-2700) and continued until 2006 with 2000 incidents. in 2008, the crimes were falling down and two of them reached their lowest rates. the burglary constantly dropped to 1200 and the robbery fell to 500.
Furthermore
, the incidents slightly rose even though the rates fluctuated.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • changes
  • took place
  • three different areas of crime
  • New Port city center
  • from 2003 to 2012
  • summarise
  • information
  • selecting
  • reporting
  • main features
  • comparisons
  • where relevant
  • overall
  • crime rates
  • downward trend
  • most significant drop
  • observed
  • theft
  • burglary
  • on the other hand
  • slight increase
  • drug-related offenses
  • same period
  • declined steadily
  • significant decrease
  • 10-year period
  • in contrast
  • slight decline
  • remaining years
  • violent crimes
  • relatively stable
  • slight fluctuation
  • conclusion
  • recorded
  • small increase
  • initially
  • then declined slightly
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