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Some people believe that it is better to stay with one company during a career. Do you agree or disagree with this point of view? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

#people #company #career #point
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continueing
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continuing
one
job
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life is
better
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way
 in view of human resources, changing
job
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jobs
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 is
one
 of the most effective
way
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ways
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 to broaden
one
's horizons. To
aquire
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acquire
a
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wide range of knowledge
and
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possibility, I almost disagree with
this
 statement.
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Continuing
one
job
 requires a deep
persistance
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persistence
, cherishing the policy of a company and
cope
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 with its struggling terms to go beyond the difficulties is evidently required ability for
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most
of
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the
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companies. And
also
 a
long term
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job
 experience will help to optimize the
way
 of work;
however
, it may have a possibility to narrow our view of life. Since society has been changing
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 a staggering pace thanks to the
investiment
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investment
 of
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AI, we have to catch up with the
chainging
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changing
 needs of markets. But
nonetheless
, gathering information
of
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 current
affeirs
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affairs
 is
considerably
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 hard task; and we
are not naturally prefer
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to
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hardships, we will not be able to a trend-savvy
person
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people
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.
One
 better
way
 to change
this
 situation is to change our circumstances, especially our jobs. If the environment is changed, we are more likely to collect the news to make efficient the new
job
.
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, we
are tend
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 to have much
intellest
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interest
intellect
surveing
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survey
 news and there are many opportunities to utilize our previous companies' experience.
This
 change will assist
for
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both of our
indivisuals
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individuals
individual
 and the companies. In
the
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conclusion,
continueing
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continuing
one
job
 needs
diligece
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diligence
, changing our environment may help to collect the current affairs which
is
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 practically useful to catch up with the changing demand.
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