The diagram below shows the average hours of unpaid work per week done by people in different categories. (Unpaid work refers to such activities as childcare in the home, housework and gardening.)
The chart presented illustrates the average number of weekly time spent performing unpaid working activities,
such
as housekeeping and parenting. The two categories represented are married women
and men
.
Regarding the first category, it can be appreciated how there is a correlation between the size of the family and the working hours
.
Mothers with three or more offspring spend twice the time working unpaid hours
as married women
without kids. According to
the chart, if a married lady gives birth once or twice times, she can expect to see an increase of 20 hours
on average for this
kind of labour.
Continuing with the second category, the first thing that catches the eye is the difference in working hours
between the two genders. Married men
without children work an average of 10 hours
less than their wives. But as soon as children arrive the gap grows and can even reach more than 40 hours
on average.
Another important distinction between the two categories is the trend. While
heir increases women
's working hours
, the opposite happens to men
's. While
the arrival of the first child does not modify its working routine, from the third one the hours
drop.
In conclusion, it can be stated that men
and women
have averagely different working routines inside a marriage.Submitted by gianfrancosalocchi on
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