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Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things. What is your opinion?

#space #exploration #money
Many
countries
 waste a lot of
money
to explore
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 and
investigate
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investigating
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Space
, though there are more pivotal subjects and categories than searching
space
. There are those who think that governments around the world should prepare and expend bills for more essential things than
researching
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 outside of the earth. In my opinion,
money
 should be used for projects which are related
with
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to
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 individuals in the country.
Firstly
,
shortage
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 of
foods
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food
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 will be caused in the future, and
this
 would generate serious permanent issues for children. If corporate or governors produce plans and fees for investigations of
the
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space
,
likelihood
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the likelihood
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 of
foods
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 starvation cannot be solved by
this
 research,
thus
 humans have to pay for protecting the possibility
for
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of
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 the crucial issues.
According to
 the theses written by
professor
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professors
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in
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at
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 Keio University, nationals would have to import 80%
foods
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of foods
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such
 as
vegetable
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vegetables
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 and meets from other
countries
 in 2050 in China and India because of
explosion
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the explosion
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 of population. Another key point that I would like to emphasize is the fact that war is happening between Ukraine and Russia, and it is the most critical
things
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thing
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 which developed
countries
 must resolve,
hence
 they have to pay more
money
 for intervening
the
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 battle.
For instance
,
Japanese
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the Japanese
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 prime minister sent only
helmet
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helmets
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 to Europe
country
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countries
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, even though he announced to invest rockets. In conclusion, many developed
countries
such
 as Japan,
US
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the US
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, Russia and China utilize their
money
 for understanding
mars
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 and
moons
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,
nonetheless
, there are more potential causes that would bother children in 2030.
Therefore
, I think that government must spend
money
for
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on
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 preventing these kinds of matters rather than
space
.
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