In many countries around the world Life expectancy is increasing. Discuss the advantages and advantages of this situation and give your own opinion.

From all around the world
people
are expecting more about
life
there are numerous advantages and disadvantages to Increasing
the
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life
expectancy which will be discussed in the following Paragraphs As far as I’m concerned The benefits
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the drawbacks. In
this
paragraph we will talk about the advantages of more expectancy from
life
When
people
expect more about their
life
they will work harder and they will need more in their
life
will they get cold feet about their wishes
people
all around the world will get up early will try to work hard and we’ll need more about themselves by way of example the
people
that expected more in
life
will be
hard working
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and by the end of the day they will try more for their future
specially
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their family future
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For example
we can talk about the mature persons that have received a lot of money from
hard working
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like A man who invented Microsoft called Bill Gates he was waiting for more
life
and more reasons to live in
life
till he gets rich and
have
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more money. In
this
paragraph I will talk about
drawbacks
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of needing more in
life
When
people
put more pressure
under
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own
shoulder
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they will try harder and they will get more anxious about
life
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life
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you will feel anger and by feeling anger you may stop working and that may hurt your purpose hurt your
life
and your family because you will get depressed and sad by not getting all the expecting you have from
life
. By feeling that kind of anger you will be sad all the time and anxious and ended up and ended up being depressed .
According to
what has been discussed benefits of Anticipation in
life
Outweighs The cons of
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more
prospect
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at
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the way we live all around the world.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • demographics
  • societal development
  • healthcare system
  • pension funds
  • multigenerational
  • workforce
  • economic sustainability
  • intergenerational inequality
  • longevity
  • proactive policy
  • geriatrics
  • senior citizens
  • ageing population
  • fertility rates
  • dependency ratio
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