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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperature rising? How should we deal with this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own experiences or knowledge

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Some people believe that the increasing temperatures of the globe are only
due to
 man-made activities. There are various man-made reasons regarding
this
 issue and to tackle
this
 problem several measures can be taken. The following essay would deal with those reasons
as well as
 solutions.
To begin
 with, one of the most vital reasons for global warming is the reduction of the number of
trees
 around the world. People are chopping down a significant amount of
trees
 throughout the year and
that is
 the principal cause of global warming.
For example
, around 25% of
trees
 in the world are cut down and that results in the increasing temperatures of the world.
In addition
, the excessiveness of pollution
also
 causes global warming
such
 as noise pollution.
Therefore
, we can come to the point that only man-made causes are responsible for global warming. The primary focus should be raising awareness among the public regarding global warming. Several measures can be taken to achieve
this
.
For example
, arranging a campaign or tree plantation. Government and non-government organizations can work on
this
.
Moreover
, from the government level steps should be taken to control the cutting down of
trees
.
Additionally
, if in the national ,curriculum the drawbacks of global warming can be added and that would be more effective to control global warming.
To conclude
, only man-made causes are responsible for global warming
therefore
, we should keep in mind that only controlling global warming can lead to a plausible solution to global warming.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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