Advances in science and technology and other areas of society in the last 100 years have transformed the way we live as well as postponing the day we die. There is no better life to be alive than now.

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advancement
of
technology
and science has made a dramatically changed in
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society. It is often argued that
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changes will be beneficial to
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such
as
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life
expectancy.
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as to whether it is a blessing or curse, there arises a heated debate among people. As far as I’m concerned, I personally agree that the invention of
technology
has made our
life
convenient and the
advancement
of treating cancers in human
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.
Firstly
, there is
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significant
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between the past and present which is the appearance of social media
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platforms
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. Social media acts as an older version of
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that allow us to communicate with people in different parts of the world.
However
, the major differences between them are the message can be received instantly and without even any charges.
Secondly
, the
advancement
of
technology
has made
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to
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play a role as
an active learning resources
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towards everyone.
For example
, we no longer have to attend bakery classes as You tube’s creators have uploaded different kinds of
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and videos onto the platform that allow everyone to learn from it.
Furthermore
,
advancement
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of
technology
has made our average
life
span to be increased compared to the previous decade.
For instance
, nowadays hospitals have used different kinds of
technology
to detect underlying
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so that patients can receive medical attention promptly.
For
this
reason, the earlier the detection of cancer from the
technology
manages to reduce the mortality rate and it can
also
help to ease the work of a medical practitioner. Not only
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but
also
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vaccine
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vaccines
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from biotechnology managed to eradicate
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virus in the community. By having
this
approach, millions of people are being saved from
this
vaccine. In conclusion,
according to
the arguments and examples given, I personally believe that
technology
and science have made our
life
improved. In the future, we will
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see government
takes
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greater
measure
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measures
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to improve the
advancement
of
technology
for the well-being of the community.
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